| Title: Gun, Roses, Beer, and Antics
| 26 Jun 2008 3:53 pm
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| Reviewer: fictionfan (Anonymous)
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neat story idea, you might want to re-read and correct a few silly mistakes for example I don't think Severus "Pooped" the CD into the radio, he probably "Popped" it in.
There was another one towards the end, Snape was speaking but I can't find it atm.
Keep Writing!
Author's Response: That's an amazing typo and def just made my day. It's fixed though, thanks for pointing it out!
| Title: Gun, Roses, Beer, and Antics
| 26 Jun 2008 3:01 pm
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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this is an interesting start. I like how unique the situation is. All the dialogue is a little overpowering though, with so many descriptions of the actions that could go along with them but don't. I am looking forward to Harry and Snape interacting more, and the story focusing on them. Good start so far!
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