| Title: Chapter 29
| 22 Apr 2013 8:40 am
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| Reviewer: Maddie (Anonymous)
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| Title: Chapter 29
| 15 Apr 2013 6:33 am
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| Reviewer: TheBigCats (Anonymous)
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loved it....i was waiting for harry to realize that tim is severus then i found out about the rules ......one of the best sevitus i've read
Yay. ^^ *applauds enthusiastically*
Such a wonderful conclusion! I like that Harry doesn't really clearly remember his dreams, and that his knowledge of Tim's identity isn't conscious.
This entire fic was a most enjoyable read (truly, I had difficulty dragging myself away to do homework). You have a wonderful way with words and the images you paint are so clear and well thought.
Absolutely delightful, clear through. A definite favorite--10 for 10.
Harry quipped, "I supposed you'll turn into a Cheshire cat any second."
"In your state, it would be a hookah-smoking-caterpillar." snorted the man.
There are no words to express the amount of love for those lines. I fangirled. Complete with flailing.
Love this chapter.
Hmmm.... I have a theory about how Tim and Snape are connected. Actually, it's a suspicion I had before beginning to read this tale. Part of me says it is way too obvious, but another says it's still plausible. I'm not confident to say what it is, though.
Hmm....
I rather like the conversations between Harry and Snape in the dreamscape--wonderfully in character, they are. Not entirely sure precisely what to interpret of them. Just as I'm convinced things might be one way, I start to think they be something else.
Now, I must go find out who's screaming and why. D:
I love the way you portray dreamscapes, as well as the manner you weave them into the waking world that is seamless without being disorienting. That can be quite the trick, sometimes, but you certainly seem to have mastered it.
This chapter is a great start--I'm looking forward to the reading through the rest of the tale.
| Title: Chapter 25
| 10 Nov 2012 4:12 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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The following sentence needs a closing quote mark.
"Then I want an autographed copy.
| Title: Chapter 23
| 10 Nov 2012 3:40 pm
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| Reviewer: Opal (Anonymous)
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Two capatal letters in Our.
OUr guess is
PS. I really like your world-building and writing.
| Title: Chapter 23
| 10 Nov 2012 3:31 pm
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| Reviewer: Opal (Anonymous)
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I think in the following sentence "shouted Ernie at her" is a little jarring. I think "Ernie shouted at her" flows better.
"Maybe, you're supposed to see that your patient actually gets to where he's supposed to go!" shouted Ernie at her,
| Title: Chapter 22
| 10 Nov 2012 3:28 pm
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| Reviewer: Opal (Anonymous)
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The "to take him" has been repeated twice in the following sentence.
Maybe he could pay some poor jonesing junkie to take him to take him somewhere.
Wow! I can't believe I've never read this story before. It's amazing. I stayed up late to finish reading it so I can't really put a lot of coherent sentences together, but I just wanted to tell you how much I loved it :)
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