Reviews For Digging for the Bones
I hope you don't mind the critism but I usually can very definitely hear your characters and their language is accurately portrayed - this really isn't right no matter how provoked she is. So glad to see you writing though.
Minerva really is experiencing effects that are stroke-like and neurology is weird.
The use of unusual-for-the-patient slang only when she gets angry is well documented. It happens (to put it simply) because the emotional/less verbal part of her brain is the part least damaged. When she gets hijacked by her emotions, the words available to her are the words most emotionally charged. So, she might even be using student slang that annoys her, f'r instance. Not because she'd ever *normally* use them, but because the words are emotionally charged and thus available.
The accent might be colloqial OR it might actually be a symptom of her health problems.
That sweetness and light act? Same thing...she can feel herself about to blurt out something inappropriate, so she goes into acting like Molly to get a handle on it. The actions of a strong woman trying to keep it together for the next half hour. You see it in dementia patients in the early stages sometimes.
I appreciate the feedback and hope this explains some of the OTC.
I hope, that next chapter will be updated faster.. and their come up with responsible plan of Sirius being part of Harry's life.
And I hope for more Harry & Severus interactions next chapter.
I'm also glad you didn't have Black and Severus in a big fight over Harry. I wonder what Albus was intending?
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