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Title: Black 16 Sep 2014 3:01 pm
Reviewer: Kai (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I absolutely love your writing and was so excited to see a new update (although would be even more delighted to have a update to Severus' dreams - but I have to indignantly speak out as a Scottish lady. No Scottish teacher would ever speak as Minerva did in this chapter - it just isn't believable. The language she used just jarrs in an otherwise fabulous piece of work.
    I hope you don't mind the critism but I usually can very definitely hear your characters and their language is accurately portrayed - this really isn't right no matter how provoked she is. So glad to see you writing though.

    Author's Response:

    Minerva really is experiencing effects that are stroke-like and neurology is weird.

    For some really interesting reads on weird neurological things you should read Oliver Sacks. His book "The Man Who Mistook His Wife for a Hat" talks about different types of aphasia.

    Some of the effects Minerva is experiencing come from those accounts.

    The use of unusual-for-the-patient slang only when she gets angry is well documented. It happens (to put it simply) because the emotional/less verbal part of her brain is the part least damaged. When she gets hijacked by her emotions, the words available to her are the words most emotionally charged. So, she might even be using student slang that annoys her, f'r instance. Not because she'd ever *normally* use them, but because the words are emotionally charged and thus available.

    My aunt actually had just this sort of aphasia after a stroke. She would get angry and use Welsh words and curse (which she never did before). We could never actually tell if she was having us on or not--sometimes we'd swear she was using it a license to say things that would normally be politely kept in one's head.

    Curiously, she picked up words she never used when she was younger, or she used nonsense words that sounded like they had meaning in context. Her doctor actually told my cousin that perhaps the old woman should go to a home where there were more native Welsh speakers. Her accent was Pure North Wales (he said) and given her use of Welsh words when English words failed her, obviously she needed to be among people who had less trouble understanding her.

    Except that she was from Newport (South Wales) and was a native English speaker. Her accent only sounded "North Wales" because the damage from the stroke actually changed the way she heard and pronounced things. It is also not uncommon for people with word finding problems to use unusual (for them) wordage to substitute the meaning.

    The accent might be colloqial OR it might actually be a symptom of her health problems.

    That sweetness and light act? Same thing...she can feel herself about to blurt out something inappropriate, so she goes into acting like Molly to get a handle on it. The actions of a strong woman trying to keep it together for the next half hour. You see it in dementia patients in the early stages sometimes.

    I appreciate the feedback and hope this explains some of the OTC.
Title: Black 15 Sep 2014 2:45 pm
Reviewer: Ann Jinn (Signed) [Report This]
    I love Minerva and it is to bad Dumbldore is not taking her seriously.

    Severus has grown up - a lot and so has Sirius.
Title: Black 13 Sep 2014 12:50 am
Reviewer: Jaylen (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Well, I loved the way you wrote the chapter. Responsible Sirius and Severus was done really well! Great chapter. Loving the story.
Title: Black 12 Sep 2014 7:38 pm
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    Great to see an update :)
Title: Black 11 Sep 2014 11:19 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Very OOC with Sirius but very well done. Thank you another excellent chapter!
Title: Black 11 Sep 2014 5:00 pm
Reviewer: snarky Beth (Signed) [Report This]
    Well that meeting didn't go down like any of us expected, did it? lol. I really like the turn of events and I hope Severus and Sirius can work together to help Harry.
Title: Black 11 Sep 2014 10:30 am
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This story is such a beautiful piece of work. I am so thankful for an update! Wonderful as always...
Title: Black 10 Sep 2014 8:45 am
Reviewer: TheDivinationClassroom (Signed) [Report This]
    Woo! New Chapter :) Very interesting depiction of the dead, and lovely character development
Title: Black 09 Sep 2014 2:24 pm
Reviewer: Lea (Anonymous) [Report This]
    You wrote Responsible!Sirius very well. Although Sirius is within it a little more OOC than mostly, but still I like the outcome of their conversation very much :)

    I hope, that next chapter will be updated faster.. and their come up with responsible plan of Sirius being part of Harry's life.
    And I hope for more Harry & Severus interactions next chapter.
Title: Black 09 Sep 2014 10:32 am
Reviewer: severusphoenix (Signed) [Report This]
    The whole necromancy thing is getting more interesting, especially with the founder, Hufflepuff having been a necromancer. It would be interesting to here more about what happened with Salazar.
    I'm also glad you didn't have Black and Severus in a big fight over Harry. I wonder what Albus was intending?
Title: Black 09 Sep 2014 3:56 am
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    Ha. And Severus turns out to be the better man. I hadn't expected Black to be willing to let Harry stay with Snape. Good for him. Good for Severus for thinking of Harry first. And good for Minerva for her "speech defect." I wonder what plan the ghosts were offering support for?
Title: Black 09 Sep 2014 3:27 am
Reviewer: silverstargirl (Signed) [Report This]
    I am really proud of Severus for doing what is right....and allowing Sirius to continue to see Harry. I am very glad that Sirius isn't going to be trying for custody, as well. ;D

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