| Title: Chapter 5
| 03 May 2013 5:16 am
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| Reviewer: Christina (Anonymous)
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This story is amazing. I have a feeling I have read it on another site, but I am not certain where. Perhaps Fanfiction?
Anyway, the way that you depict the relationship between Harry and Snape is very well done.
The ending of this chapter was especially sweet.
| Title: Chapter 24
| 18 Apr 2013 2:36 pm
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| Reviewer: dancer (Anonymous)
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awesome story; can't wait for more
| Title: Chapter 24
| 08 Apr 2013 10:04 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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I love your story! It is awesome! Please continue writing it! I want to see if Albus can renew his trust and love with Severus.
| Title: Chapter 3
| 18 Mar 2013 5:19 am
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| Reviewer: txn (Signed)
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Your characterization is good, but your grammatical errors keep me from really enjoying your story.
The main one is the use of "your" and "you're."
"Your" indicates ownership. You've used it correctly here: “Open your eyes wolf, of course he doesn’t want to stay here. Can you blame him?”
"You're" is a contraction of "you" and "are." Here is an instance where you should have used "you're" instead of "your:" “As well as anyone can be I guess, he’s still scared if that’s what YOUR asking." It should be "you're" as in, "if that's what you're asking."
But as Albus said, not for a LOOOONG time. Good chapter, but I think you need a beta :P. Wish I could, but my schedule is too busy to allow me to write my own stories! Kudos, and keep up the good work
wow, Dudley to the rescue!
O.o wow, I can't believe Albus said that. He will have to earn their trust back this time.
I think the old guy needs a vacation. He just needs sometime to relax and peel off all the stress that's sticking to him like wet toilet paper.
Just please make him re-earn Sev's trust. It cheapens Sev if Dumbles doesn't have to work for it. Plus you didn't bash the man, you merely showed he wasn't perfect.
| Title: Chapter 24
| 11 Mar 2013 11:13 pm
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| Reviewer: JWOHPfan (Anonymous)
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You don't write Dumbledore bashing, yet you have no problem beating the crap out of poor Harry and letting Dumblecrap bash Severus?????? Now what is wrong with that picture????? Color me disappointed! You're a great writer but really?
| Title: Chapter 24
| 11 Mar 2013 11:09 pm
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| Reviewer: JWOHPfan (Anonymous)
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He shouldn't forgive the old coot this time, he so does NOT deserve it!!! Just because he always has, doesn't mean he has to this time!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Title: Chapter 24
| 11 Mar 2013 10:46 pm
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| Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous)
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yes you did dumble-ass and you ever deserved the trust you had! more please when you can thank for the update. I know what you mean about the dumble bashing but he went to far ... sev will forgive but will he really think of albus the same way , I mean I wouldn't
Another well written chapter.
Severus might not be able to do anything to Vernon but nothing is stopping a the house elves from seeking justice for Harry.
oh no...Really hope someone comes to help Harry right now - maybe Dumbles will get to Vernon before Harry gets hurt - or will it be Dudley who will do it?
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Hugs and Love,
Vanime
Author's Response: Of course, its gotta be Dudley, I hinted at it a bit lol
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